tPOL PRESENTATION PREPARATION:
ODE TO THE EARTH-CHALLENGE EXTENSION SONNET
oh how wonderful it would be to see
the world. to look at the ocean’s pristine.
the culture! the colors! the history!
oh to gaze upon the mountains so keen.
and we could paint the rivers and deserts
together, we could lead a life of love.
to climb! to swim! to the most untouched parts.
let’s reach for the stars in the dome above.
I want to hear stories of the people
I want to share the wisdom of the earth
so let’s laugh and share and forget evil
give a little and show what gives you worth.
so let’s be those people, let’s make a change
let’s see the world and make it not so strange.
THE MAGICAL MODELS OF LOVE
It is hard to define love, since it is different for everyone who experiences it but Shakespeare uses his poetry and writing to come to an idea. In Shakespeare’s Sonnet 16, he attempts to tell what love is: “Let me not to the marriage of true minds, Admit impediments. Love is not love”(Shakespeare, Sonnet 16). Throughout his sonnet he defines qualities that are and are not a part of love. This is one definition and it can be analyzed for one’s own interpretation but he is saying true love is for eternity; it does not end at death and it is permanent. He says that you cannot merely say love is love because love is a word and love itself is so much more. Derived from this emotion there are ultimately three different models of love. The lunatic, the lover, and the poet are three models that every human embodies consciously and subconsciously. Shakespeare’s “A Midsummer’s Night Dream” shows us that different people or settings bring out different models of love or, “forms of humanity”, and will in turn influence the person's actions. These models subsequently lead to forms of human emotion and how humans act in the world. It is clear that human emotions are all a part of love, for love is seen as the only magic because of the power it holds.
Shakespeare shows us the different models of love through comparing and contrasting different perspectives and highlighting the different moments at which these models are “brought to life”. Evidence of someone who adequately displayed all three forms, is Theseus. This is shown when he is hearing the tales of the lovers from their time in the forest. Theseus is the poet when he takes his ideas and the stories and tries to separate what is real and what is fantasy. He searches for something he can hold onto and he does not know what he believes. “And as imagination bodies forth, the forms of things unknown”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). Theseus isn’t discounting the fairy-world or the mystic happenings in the forest. They aren’t unreal but they are unknown. Maybe this is because of his alleged past affair with Titania. I think that he hadn’t accepted it happened or didn’t believe it had happened, until he heard the lovers resonated somewhere inside him. He is the lunatic because of his superstition for what was reality. He does not want to necessarily admit this however, “Turns them to shapes and gives to airy nothing” (Act 5, Scene 1, 17). Theseus may not be the man we originally thought and he is hiding something he may not even know he is hiding. I think his subconscious voice inside him is the reason he let the lovers marry who they pleased. This is where the lover in him is seen because his heart influences his decision. Without hearing the lovers stories or being somewhat apart of the “magic” of love he wouldn't have made that decision. The moment, the words, and the people,all affect what parts of you are emphasized and when. In the forest, all reason was lost and the lovers were highlighting the madness and crazy love inside them and not their poetry or art or reasoning.
Dana Gioia continues to study and analyze what Shakespeare wrote and describes the “forms of humanity” that all humans embody whether we realize it or not, and how each affect how we act when we are epitomizing these models. In his poem he speaks of the lunatic, the lover and the poet; this compares to Theseus’s speech at the end of the play when he is hearing the lover’s story. He makes it easier for us to relate and understand these mentalities and personages, especially the poet. We all have each of these models in us. At the beginning of his speech Theseus pronounces, “The lunatic, the lover and the poet are of imagination all compact”(Act 5, Scene I, 7-8)...and then he goes in to show why this is. “The poet’s eye, in a fine frenzy rolling”(Act 5, Scene I, 12). The poet’s eye sees things in a different way, different than someone who has not yet realized their lyricist potential would see something. Furthermore his mind is in a frenzy because he is constantly assimilating what he sees and thinks into words; his brainwork is on a continual roll and in a well-timed rhythm. He is an artist. His thoughts and actions are heavily influenced by his heart, similar to the lover. “Doth glance from heaven to earth, from earth to heaven” (Act 5, Scene I, 13). In addition to forming what he sees into songs, the poet looks to find what is reality and what is fiction, what is known and what is unknown. From the poem by Dana Gioia, he says “The tales we tell are either false or true, but neither purpose is the point.”(Dana Gioia, The Lunatic, The Lover and the Poet). He is telling us that it doesn’t matter if the story is fact or fiction, either way it is a story and that is what matters. “And as imagination bodies forth”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). As he sees what is real he begins to form a story out of his new found discoveries about the lover and the lunatic. “The forms of things unknown, the poet’s pen”(Act 5, Scene 1, 16). His mind is a chaos of ideas but the uncharted thoughts, the exotic words, the nameless ideas are slowly put into shapes on the paper or spoken out loud in well formed phrases. They are put to rest as almost a release. “Turns them to shapes, and gives to airy nothing”(Act 5, Scene 1, 17). Suddenly his mind isn’t a chaos of creativity, it’s organized and silent as “A local habitation and name” (Act 5, Scene 1, 18). The poet’s mind is at rest and his creativity exhausted, at least for now. Again from the poem by Gioia,“The tale is often wiser than the teller.” The author or poet may be confused as to why he came up with his story, how he came up with it, and why it’s now over so suddenly. The story has a mind of its own however, because each person who reads it or is a part of it has a different interpretation. This ‘poet’ mentality is brought forth when humans feel inspired to do or create something. This mindset however, does not last forever, it is a few brief moments in time where you feel overtaken with a sense of purpose and urge to do create or do something you feel strongly about. Then as all things do; the creativity, the “storm in you mind” ends and we are left with a blank slate. The lunatic and the lover are more self explanatory and more obvious personages seen in our everyday lives. All the different models relate to each other in some way on a deeper level to love.
Love is an emotion; it is so powerful that other emotions stem from from it. Love is magic. I believe that the only magic is love because it can change people in ways nothing else can. Love is transformative, it can make or break a family, just as magic seemingly can. Hermia is ready to die rather than marry someone she doesn’t love and her father is ready to enforce that and let it happen, “As she is mine, I may dispose of her.” She responds to this threat with the words, “So will I grow, so live, so die, my lord...My soul consents not to give sovereignty.” (Act I, Scene I, 43 & 80-84). What other emotion would make you feel that strongly? Did that storm in our minds, that was referenced in the speech by Theseus happen? Did the forest happen? Maybe these “forms of humanity” and the models of love are metaphors for a dream, for love or magic, and for our own reality. When the lovers awake, they try and recount what has happened. “These things seem small and indistinguishable like far off mountains turned into clouds.” (Act 4, Scene I, 194-195) Demetrius, confused questions “Are you sure we are awake? It seems to me that yet we sleep we dream. Do you not think the Duke was here and bid us follow him?”(Act 4, Scene I, 200-204) One of the lovers replies with a yes and Demetrius responds “Why, then we are awake! Let’s follow him and by the way let us recount our dreams.” (Act 4, Scene I, 208-209) This proves that we create our own reality, whatever we want that to be. The forest could have been a symbol of hope for a certain love form “Through Athens gates we have devised to steal to seek new friends and stranger companies. In a league beyond this town I will marry thee.” (Act I, Scene I, 163,167, 218, 224). Demetrius had been in love with Helena, and Lysander and Hermia were in love. What other than love would have made Demetrius suddenly forget his love for Helena? (Act I, Scene I, 101-112). An analogy to show the way I see love is a sun. Its center is humanity and its rays are the different models of love: for example the lunatic, the lover and the poet. The rays are also human emotions that can be derived from love; anger, hate, revenge or sadness. Sometimes people do not know the potential for these rays or even that the possibility exists to grow them further.
Shakespeare was a love enthusiast and he saw all the different perspectives and models of what it is in such a beautiful way. To me and many others I presume, love is a mystery. It is the greatest mystery to those who have not experienced it and an even greater one to those who have. It can make you do the most irrational things and leave a person asking themselves why. As you can see in Gioia’s poem, “The world, I say, depends upon a spell, Spoken each night by lovers unaware, Of their own sorcery.” Lovers do not know how their feelings are affecting them; they are unaware at how intense their love is. It envelopes them, cutting them off from everything else. It is blinding. As was mentioned in the beginning Helena says "Love sees not with the eyes, but with the mind and therefore is winged cupid painted blind," and how very true this is. This passage from Gioia helps us to better see the many hidden meanings of Shakespeare’s writing. It is what is under the surface that matters, that’s what means something. It helps to realize that the play and the story is however you perceive it, “We weave the fabric of our own existence out of words”, (Dana Gioia, The Lunatic, The Lover and The Poet) you can choose how to interpret something, you can choose how it affects you, and you can choose your own reality as the characters in A Midsummer Night’s Dream did. Just as in the poem by Gioia said, your interpretation can be real or fantasy, it can be real and fantasy, either way it’s a story. Was the forest a dream? Dreams are inspired by our daily experiences, because of this are they a 'figment' of our own reality. Was it a hope or desire? It is for the individual to find that out for themselves. It is also for the individual to find a balance between the different models of love in themselves. The lunatic, the lover, and the poet all have their positive and negative attributes; we all have them in us. The forms of humanity and love are not perfect but neither are humans and the sooner we recognize the magic of love we have in our lives and how that affects us and the more fulfilled our lives will be. The powerful emotion of love creates and subsequently leads to all other human emotions and ideals and is the essence of what makes us human. It makes a person wonder if love is something more than an emotion, this is a fantastical idea that some may not believe exists, but it does for those who believe.
Final Humanities Essay Rubric
Structure: (75 points)
The introduction and thesis summarizes your upcoming argument in a clear and concise manner
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): __25_____/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Derived from this emotion, there are ultimately three different models of love…
It is clear that human emotions are all a part of love, for love is seen as the only magic, because of the power it holds.
Each paragraph begin with clear topic sentences
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): _____25___/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Shakespeare shows us the different models of love through comparing and contrasting different perspectives and highlighting the different moments at which these models are “brought to life”.
Each paragraph's evidence is relevant and clear. The analysis following the evidence
explains how the evidence proves the topic sentence.
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): ___25______/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“And as imagination bodies forth, the forms of things unknown”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). Theseus isn’t discounting the fairy-world or the mystic happenings in the forest. They aren’t UNREAL, they are UNKNOWN. Maybe this is because of his alleged past affair with Titania. I think that he hadn’t accepted it happened, or didn’t believe it had happened, until he heard the lovers resonated somewhere inside him.
Craftsmanship: (75 points)
There are no spelling errors or punctuation errors (esp. comma splices, incomplete
sentences, incorrect semicolons)
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): _______25__/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Then as all things do; the creativity, the “storm in you mind” ends and we are left with a blank slate.
Evidence is cited correctly
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): ______25___/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“These things seem small and indistinguishable like far off mountains turned into clouds.” (Act 4, Scene I, 194-195)
Sentences are dynamic; they vary in length and use multiple structures (especially
concessive sentences or NPA's)
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): __20_______/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Dana Gioia continues to study and analyze what Shakespeare wrote and describes the “forms of humanity” that all humans embody whether we realize it or not, and how each affect how we act when we are epitomizing these models... We all have each of these models in us.
Creativity: (50 points)
The thesis infers a hidden meaning beneath the obvious facts of the subject
(0, 10, 15 or 20 points): ____20_____/20
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
The lunatic, the lover, and the poet, are three models that every human embodies, both consciously and subconsciously.
Each paragraph creatively interprets the meaning of the evidence to further prove the
thesis:
(0, 5, 10, or 15 points): _______15__/15
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“The poet’s eye, in a fine frenzy rolling”(Act 5, Scene I, 12). The poet’s eye sees things in a different way, different than someone who has not yet realized their lyricist potential would see something. Furthermore his mind is in a frenzy because he is constantly assimilating what he sees and thinks into words, his brainwork is on a continual roll and in a well-timed rhythm.
Love is an emotion; it is so powerful that other emotions stem from from it.
The conclusion wraps the different layers of meaning into an easily summarized (yet
still complex) series of thoughts:
(0, 5, 10, or 15 points): ___15______/15
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
It is also for the individual to find a balance between the different models of love in themselves.
The forms of humanity, love, is not perfect but neither are humans and the sooner we recognize the magic of love we have in our lives and how that affects us, the more fulfilled our lives will be.
Final grade: _______________195/200
This is a well-written essay that ranges over a variety of topics without ever losing its central thesis or straying off from the underlying exploration of how different settings elicit different forms of love. The work masterfully weaves together quotes from multiple sources and clearly explains how the quotes move the thread of thought along. There were a few comma splices, so just continue to be mindful of those as you continue to grow and develop as a writer. Overall this was a masterful work that required patience and sitting with complicated ideas for a long time in order to allow interesting syntheses and analyses to emerge. Well done.
oh how wonderful it would be to see
the world. to look at the ocean’s pristine.
the culture! the colors! the history!
oh to gaze upon the mountains so keen.
and we could paint the rivers and deserts
together, we could lead a life of love.
to climb! to swim! to the most untouched parts.
let’s reach for the stars in the dome above.
I want to hear stories of the people
I want to share the wisdom of the earth
so let’s laugh and share and forget evil
give a little and show what gives you worth.
so let’s be those people, let’s make a change
let’s see the world and make it not so strange.
THE MAGICAL MODELS OF LOVE
It is hard to define love, since it is different for everyone who experiences it but Shakespeare uses his poetry and writing to come to an idea. In Shakespeare’s Sonnet 16, he attempts to tell what love is: “Let me not to the marriage of true minds, Admit impediments. Love is not love”(Shakespeare, Sonnet 16). Throughout his sonnet he defines qualities that are and are not a part of love. This is one definition and it can be analyzed for one’s own interpretation but he is saying true love is for eternity; it does not end at death and it is permanent. He says that you cannot merely say love is love because love is a word and love itself is so much more. Derived from this emotion there are ultimately three different models of love. The lunatic, the lover, and the poet are three models that every human embodies consciously and subconsciously. Shakespeare’s “A Midsummer’s Night Dream” shows us that different people or settings bring out different models of love or, “forms of humanity”, and will in turn influence the person's actions. These models subsequently lead to forms of human emotion and how humans act in the world. It is clear that human emotions are all a part of love, for love is seen as the only magic because of the power it holds.
Shakespeare shows us the different models of love through comparing and contrasting different perspectives and highlighting the different moments at which these models are “brought to life”. Evidence of someone who adequately displayed all three forms, is Theseus. This is shown when he is hearing the tales of the lovers from their time in the forest. Theseus is the poet when he takes his ideas and the stories and tries to separate what is real and what is fantasy. He searches for something he can hold onto and he does not know what he believes. “And as imagination bodies forth, the forms of things unknown”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). Theseus isn’t discounting the fairy-world or the mystic happenings in the forest. They aren’t unreal but they are unknown. Maybe this is because of his alleged past affair with Titania. I think that he hadn’t accepted it happened or didn’t believe it had happened, until he heard the lovers resonated somewhere inside him. He is the lunatic because of his superstition for what was reality. He does not want to necessarily admit this however, “Turns them to shapes and gives to airy nothing” (Act 5, Scene 1, 17). Theseus may not be the man we originally thought and he is hiding something he may not even know he is hiding. I think his subconscious voice inside him is the reason he let the lovers marry who they pleased. This is where the lover in him is seen because his heart influences his decision. Without hearing the lovers stories or being somewhat apart of the “magic” of love he wouldn't have made that decision. The moment, the words, and the people,all affect what parts of you are emphasized and when. In the forest, all reason was lost and the lovers were highlighting the madness and crazy love inside them and not their poetry or art or reasoning.
Dana Gioia continues to study and analyze what Shakespeare wrote and describes the “forms of humanity” that all humans embody whether we realize it or not, and how each affect how we act when we are epitomizing these models. In his poem he speaks of the lunatic, the lover and the poet; this compares to Theseus’s speech at the end of the play when he is hearing the lover’s story. He makes it easier for us to relate and understand these mentalities and personages, especially the poet. We all have each of these models in us. At the beginning of his speech Theseus pronounces, “The lunatic, the lover and the poet are of imagination all compact”(Act 5, Scene I, 7-8)...and then he goes in to show why this is. “The poet’s eye, in a fine frenzy rolling”(Act 5, Scene I, 12). The poet’s eye sees things in a different way, different than someone who has not yet realized their lyricist potential would see something. Furthermore his mind is in a frenzy because he is constantly assimilating what he sees and thinks into words; his brainwork is on a continual roll and in a well-timed rhythm. He is an artist. His thoughts and actions are heavily influenced by his heart, similar to the lover. “Doth glance from heaven to earth, from earth to heaven” (Act 5, Scene I, 13). In addition to forming what he sees into songs, the poet looks to find what is reality and what is fiction, what is known and what is unknown. From the poem by Dana Gioia, he says “The tales we tell are either false or true, but neither purpose is the point.”(Dana Gioia, The Lunatic, The Lover and the Poet). He is telling us that it doesn’t matter if the story is fact or fiction, either way it is a story and that is what matters. “And as imagination bodies forth”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). As he sees what is real he begins to form a story out of his new found discoveries about the lover and the lunatic. “The forms of things unknown, the poet’s pen”(Act 5, Scene 1, 16). His mind is a chaos of ideas but the uncharted thoughts, the exotic words, the nameless ideas are slowly put into shapes on the paper or spoken out loud in well formed phrases. They are put to rest as almost a release. “Turns them to shapes, and gives to airy nothing”(Act 5, Scene 1, 17). Suddenly his mind isn’t a chaos of creativity, it’s organized and silent as “A local habitation and name” (Act 5, Scene 1, 18). The poet’s mind is at rest and his creativity exhausted, at least for now. Again from the poem by Gioia,“The tale is often wiser than the teller.” The author or poet may be confused as to why he came up with his story, how he came up with it, and why it’s now over so suddenly. The story has a mind of its own however, because each person who reads it or is a part of it has a different interpretation. This ‘poet’ mentality is brought forth when humans feel inspired to do or create something. This mindset however, does not last forever, it is a few brief moments in time where you feel overtaken with a sense of purpose and urge to do create or do something you feel strongly about. Then as all things do; the creativity, the “storm in you mind” ends and we are left with a blank slate. The lunatic and the lover are more self explanatory and more obvious personages seen in our everyday lives. All the different models relate to each other in some way on a deeper level to love.
Love is an emotion; it is so powerful that other emotions stem from from it. Love is magic. I believe that the only magic is love because it can change people in ways nothing else can. Love is transformative, it can make or break a family, just as magic seemingly can. Hermia is ready to die rather than marry someone she doesn’t love and her father is ready to enforce that and let it happen, “As she is mine, I may dispose of her.” She responds to this threat with the words, “So will I grow, so live, so die, my lord...My soul consents not to give sovereignty.” (Act I, Scene I, 43 & 80-84). What other emotion would make you feel that strongly? Did that storm in our minds, that was referenced in the speech by Theseus happen? Did the forest happen? Maybe these “forms of humanity” and the models of love are metaphors for a dream, for love or magic, and for our own reality. When the lovers awake, they try and recount what has happened. “These things seem small and indistinguishable like far off mountains turned into clouds.” (Act 4, Scene I, 194-195) Demetrius, confused questions “Are you sure we are awake? It seems to me that yet we sleep we dream. Do you not think the Duke was here and bid us follow him?”(Act 4, Scene I, 200-204) One of the lovers replies with a yes and Demetrius responds “Why, then we are awake! Let’s follow him and by the way let us recount our dreams.” (Act 4, Scene I, 208-209) This proves that we create our own reality, whatever we want that to be. The forest could have been a symbol of hope for a certain love form “Through Athens gates we have devised to steal to seek new friends and stranger companies. In a league beyond this town I will marry thee.” (Act I, Scene I, 163,167, 218, 224). Demetrius had been in love with Helena, and Lysander and Hermia were in love. What other than love would have made Demetrius suddenly forget his love for Helena? (Act I, Scene I, 101-112). An analogy to show the way I see love is a sun. Its center is humanity and its rays are the different models of love: for example the lunatic, the lover and the poet. The rays are also human emotions that can be derived from love; anger, hate, revenge or sadness. Sometimes people do not know the potential for these rays or even that the possibility exists to grow them further.
Shakespeare was a love enthusiast and he saw all the different perspectives and models of what it is in such a beautiful way. To me and many others I presume, love is a mystery. It is the greatest mystery to those who have not experienced it and an even greater one to those who have. It can make you do the most irrational things and leave a person asking themselves why. As you can see in Gioia’s poem, “The world, I say, depends upon a spell, Spoken each night by lovers unaware, Of their own sorcery.” Lovers do not know how their feelings are affecting them; they are unaware at how intense their love is. It envelopes them, cutting them off from everything else. It is blinding. As was mentioned in the beginning Helena says "Love sees not with the eyes, but with the mind and therefore is winged cupid painted blind," and how very true this is. This passage from Gioia helps us to better see the many hidden meanings of Shakespeare’s writing. It is what is under the surface that matters, that’s what means something. It helps to realize that the play and the story is however you perceive it, “We weave the fabric of our own existence out of words”, (Dana Gioia, The Lunatic, The Lover and The Poet) you can choose how to interpret something, you can choose how it affects you, and you can choose your own reality as the characters in A Midsummer Night’s Dream did. Just as in the poem by Gioia said, your interpretation can be real or fantasy, it can be real and fantasy, either way it’s a story. Was the forest a dream? Dreams are inspired by our daily experiences, because of this are they a 'figment' of our own reality. Was it a hope or desire? It is for the individual to find that out for themselves. It is also for the individual to find a balance between the different models of love in themselves. The lunatic, the lover, and the poet all have their positive and negative attributes; we all have them in us. The forms of humanity and love are not perfect but neither are humans and the sooner we recognize the magic of love we have in our lives and how that affects us and the more fulfilled our lives will be. The powerful emotion of love creates and subsequently leads to all other human emotions and ideals and is the essence of what makes us human. It makes a person wonder if love is something more than an emotion, this is a fantastical idea that some may not believe exists, but it does for those who believe.
Final Humanities Essay Rubric
Structure: (75 points)
The introduction and thesis summarizes your upcoming argument in a clear and concise manner
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): __25_____/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Derived from this emotion, there are ultimately three different models of love…
It is clear that human emotions are all a part of love, for love is seen as the only magic, because of the power it holds.
Each paragraph begin with clear topic sentences
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): _____25___/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Shakespeare shows us the different models of love through comparing and contrasting different perspectives and highlighting the different moments at which these models are “brought to life”.
Each paragraph's evidence is relevant and clear. The analysis following the evidence
explains how the evidence proves the topic sentence.
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): ___25______/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“And as imagination bodies forth, the forms of things unknown”(Act 5, Scene 1, 15). Theseus isn’t discounting the fairy-world or the mystic happenings in the forest. They aren’t UNREAL, they are UNKNOWN. Maybe this is because of his alleged past affair with Titania. I think that he hadn’t accepted it happened, or didn’t believe it had happened, until he heard the lovers resonated somewhere inside him.
Craftsmanship: (75 points)
There are no spelling errors or punctuation errors (esp. comma splices, incomplete
sentences, incorrect semicolons)
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): _______25__/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Then as all things do; the creativity, the “storm in you mind” ends and we are left with a blank slate.
Evidence is cited correctly
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): ______25___/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“These things seem small and indistinguishable like far off mountains turned into clouds.” (Act 4, Scene I, 194-195)
Sentences are dynamic; they vary in length and use multiple structures (especially
concessive sentences or NPA's)
(0, 10, 20, or 25 points): __20_______/25
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
Dana Gioia continues to study and analyze what Shakespeare wrote and describes the “forms of humanity” that all humans embody whether we realize it or not, and how each affect how we act when we are epitomizing these models... We all have each of these models in us.
Creativity: (50 points)
The thesis infers a hidden meaning beneath the obvious facts of the subject
(0, 10, 15 or 20 points): ____20_____/20
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
The lunatic, the lover, and the poet, are three models that every human embodies, both consciously and subconsciously.
Each paragraph creatively interprets the meaning of the evidence to further prove the
thesis:
(0, 5, 10, or 15 points): _______15__/15
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
“The poet’s eye, in a fine frenzy rolling”(Act 5, Scene I, 12). The poet’s eye sees things in a different way, different than someone who has not yet realized their lyricist potential would see something. Furthermore his mind is in a frenzy because he is constantly assimilating what he sees and thinks into words, his brainwork is on a continual roll and in a well-timed rhythm.
Love is an emotion; it is so powerful that other emotions stem from from it.
The conclusion wraps the different layers of meaning into an easily summarized (yet
still complex) series of thoughts:
(0, 5, 10, or 15 points): ___15______/15
Evidence for your score (use a quote from your paper):
It is also for the individual to find a balance between the different models of love in themselves.
The forms of humanity, love, is not perfect but neither are humans and the sooner we recognize the magic of love we have in our lives and how that affects us, the more fulfilled our lives will be.
Final grade: _______________195/200
This is a well-written essay that ranges over a variety of topics without ever losing its central thesis or straying off from the underlying exploration of how different settings elicit different forms of love. The work masterfully weaves together quotes from multiple sources and clearly explains how the quotes move the thread of thought along. There were a few comma splices, so just continue to be mindful of those as you continue to grow and develop as a writer. Overall this was a masterful work that required patience and sitting with complicated ideas for a long time in order to allow interesting syntheses and analyses to emerge. Well done.
9th GRADE tPOL QUESTIONS:
Spring 2015
Personal Connections and Adult World Connections:
1. Which project did you have the most personal connection with this year? Why?
2. What have you learned (skill, lesson, or knowledge) this year that will be most helpful for you in the future?
3. What project or projects have you done this year that have inspired you to want to learn more? Explain how you were inspired.
4. How has your attitude toward learning changed this year?
5. What connections have you made this year between what you have learned in your classes and your own personal experiences outside of school?
6. How have your learning and experiences at AHS this year changed the way you see the world?
7. What work from this year would you like to look back on and remember when you are a graduating senior?
You as a Student and a Learner (Your Work and Your Work Habits):
1. What is the most important change that you have made as a learner this year?
2. How have you taken an active role in your education this year?
3. What piece of work that you’ve done this year are you proudest of? Why?
4. If you could go back and refine one piece of work this year, what piece of work would you refine and how would you refine it?
5. If you were the teacher, what comments would your teacher make about your work habits?
6. What might you want next year’s teacher to know about your work habits?
7. What is the most difficult thing you have done this year? Why was it difficult, and how did you deal with that difficulty?
8. How has group collaboration helped you as a student?
Reflecting on Yourself and Our Model of Education
(Project Based Learning and our Student Culture)
1. What would you say to an incoming 9th grader about how to succeed in project based learning?
2. How have any of the habits of heart and mind helped you be successful as a student or person?
3. How has a relationship with a faculty member helped you be more successful in school this year?
4. How has the work in Advisory helped you grow or change as a student, as a friend, and as a citizen?
5. Project based learning is a different model than traditional models of education. Explain how Project based learning has influenced your learning and your production of work.
Spring 2015
Personal Connections and Adult World Connections:
1. Which project did you have the most personal connection with this year? Why?
- mask essay because it’s about myself, introspection and political cartoon (interesting to put issues I feel passionate about into art)
2. What have you learned (skill, lesson, or knowledge) this year that will be most helpful for you in the future?
- “organized creativity”- Final Humanities Essay, and advocacy
3. What project or projects have you done this year that have inspired you to want to learn more? Explain how you were inspired.
- wave project- researched what makes sound pleasant with my viola- my question in the end didn’t really correlate to my answers or research. Next time I will expand more on the basics of sound and how that affects human emotions. I was inspired because I feel passionate about music and understanding my viola and its workings.
4. How has your attitude toward learning changed this year?
- broader ideas on how I could take a project, surprisingly throughout the year I have had less motivation to do my work. An example of this is my Final Humanities Essay when I procrastinated but yet I opened up my ideas.
5. What connections have you made this year between what you have learned in your classes and your own personal experiences outside of school?
- socialization essay, Daniel Suelo provoked different perspective on money, physics- missionary ridge (Geologic Timeline), humanities- hidden meaning in literature
6. How have your learning and experiences at AHS this year changed the way you see the world?
- feeling of respect between adults and students, feel like I have a voice, (peak meeting and advocacy)
7. What work from this year would you like to look back on and remember when you are a graduating senior?
- BNW & FHE- challenge extensions, learned interesting things about literature in general that I wouldn’t have learned had I not done the extension
You as a Student and a Learner (Your Work and Your Work Habits):
1. What is the most important change that you have made as a learner this year?
- not being afraid to advocate for myself, and asking for help. Asking for extensions on my FHE and my political cartoon.
2. How have you taken an active role in your education this year?
- advocating for myself when I needed help, challenge extensions (BNW and FHE) helped me get out of my comfort zone
3. What piece of work that you’ve done this year are you proudest of? Why?
- socialization mask- proud of my final product, I thought it was a creative idea and BNW cartoon taught me a new style of drawing
4. If you could go back and refine one piece of work this year, what piece of work would you refine and how would you refine it?
- Shakespeare play- focus more on the acting part
- refine mousetrap car and I would remake the entire design of the car
5. If you were the teacher, what comments would your teacher make about your work habits?
- sometimes I don’t I sit and struggle, I jump to asking how to do it or the answer, I could get more out of it if I sat with it. Geometry- on the solar panel project.
6. What might you want next year’s teacher to know about your work habits?
- perfectionist, , hard to turn something in that I’m not proud of, sometimes I struggle to come up with a creative idea- political cartoon and FHE
7. What is the most difficult thing you have done this year? Why was it difficult, and how did you deal with that difficulty?
- Final Humanities Essay/ advocated for extension, after I procrastinated to the end, took apart original essay and restructured it
8. How has group collaboration helped you as a student?
- It has helped me become more flexible and open to others ideas/ not take as much control and let go (costume design)
Reflecting on Yourself and Our Model of Education
(Project Based Learning and our Student Culture)
1. What would you say to an incoming 9th grader about how to succeed in project based learning?
- be open to it, advocacy, make a project that you feel passionate about and you’re interested in (wave project)
2. How have any of the habits of heart and mind helped you be successful as a student or person?
- refinement and perspective- refined projects (Geological Timeline)- final human. essay- talked about different ideas (Shakespeare)
3. How has a relationship with a faculty member helped you be more successful in school this year?
- Matt- he was open to me asking for extensions and I feel like he trusted I would get my projects completed and to the best of my ability, I could go at my own pace to a certain extent
4. How has the work in Advisory helped you grow or change as a student, as a friend, and as a citizen?
- advisory for me has been a bit of a challenge, it has helped me to collaborate and get to know people I may not usually hang out with and to combine ideas and different interests
5. Project based learning is a different model than traditional models of education. Explain how Project based learning has influenced your learning and your production of work.
- it has helped me take my learning in a way that I am interested in, I can be artistic or express my interests, taught me how to think outside the box, although I did struggle with math this year I enjoyed project based learning in other subjects
CRITICAL THINKING (SMART GOAL)
My goal for this semester is to become a more skilled critical thinker. I struggled with this over the past semester because if I was confused about something, primarily in math and physics, I would immediately ask the teacher for the problem solving process instead of using what I already knew to try and figure it out myself. By following the SMART goal I have created I will hopefully by the end of the semester utilize critical thinking to better my life in and outside of school.
S- My specific goal for the semester is to become a more skilled critical thinker. This is a four step process: tell teachers, 1) when faced with something challenging reflect and acknowledge on what I already know 2) if I'm still struggling I will ask for help 3) I will, using the information I now know, attempt to solve problem. If I've done this a couple times and am still struggling I will visit my teacher at office hours.
M-I will measure this progress by: the completion, timeliness and my personal understanding 7/10 (almost completely learned, with few questions or confusion) on all of my assignments.
A and R-This goal is attainable and realistic because its simple, quick and something I will actually do.
T-This goal is timely because at the end of the semester I will have this plan in place and have it become a habit. I will also check in with my teachers at the end of the semester to see how I've been doing.
S- My specific goal for the semester is to become a more skilled critical thinker. This is a four step process: tell teachers, 1) when faced with something challenging reflect and acknowledge on what I already know 2) if I'm still struggling I will ask for help 3) I will, using the information I now know, attempt to solve problem. If I've done this a couple times and am still struggling I will visit my teacher at office hours.
M-I will measure this progress by: the completion, timeliness and my personal understanding 7/10 (almost completely learned, with few questions or confusion) on all of my assignments.
A and R-This goal is attainable and realistic because its simple, quick and something I will actually do.
T-This goal is timely because at the end of the semester I will have this plan in place and have it become a habit. I will also check in with my teachers at the end of the semester to see how I've been doing.
MY SELF-PORTRAIT
My self portrait represents my many different faces and personalities that make up who I am. Through the different pictures, it also shows my confusion at who I am and who I want to be. I am trying to find myself, because sometimes I feel lost and I don't know where I really stand or what face I should put to the world. The colors portray my moods. The quote I am holding up in some of the pictures is by Morley, an LA based street artist. His philosophy has really moved me, so the quote I picked was "Resist the allure of fashionable cynicism". I think this quote can have a couple different interpretations which makes it very deep and personal to me. The pictures and sharp edges also show that I am not all smooth and perfect, I need work like everyone else to smooth down those edges. One day hopefully I will truly be able to say, with confidence who I am, or maybe not, maybe I'll be searching forever.
MY STUDENT ID
Using our knowledge in Photoshop we used a template to create our student ID's.